Not Good Enough

March 10th, 2019, 4:34 pm
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Fidchell
March 10th, 2019, 4:34 pm
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Kiln is still focused on whatever it was she witnessed, but Jake tries to steer her mind from the deception.
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AssaultBird2454
March 10th, 2019, 4:41 pm
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Smart boi
Umbreon5456
March 10th, 2019, 5:10 pm
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Smart Riolu! That is the smart thing to do, I will say that much.
Star (Guest)
March 10th, 2019, 5:12 pm
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Awwwweee
comercole
March 10th, 2019, 5:34 pm
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i knew it was and illution and the devil is also a pawn to say think of failure.
Ral (Guest)
March 10th, 2019, 6:19 pm
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I'm kinda an ass here for being negative, but this story is kinda meandering. It is 144 pages and the story isn't really coming together. At least the art is good and Jake makes a compelling protagonist and there are some interesting characters, but the story is really weak at this point.
Pandemiccarp743
March 10th, 2019, 8:37 pm
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@ral u have a point i dont mind tho
SansOfDale
March 14th, 2019, 8:53 am
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* I’m usually not one to have these needs for such a relationship, but we need more Jake and Kiln moments like this. Also, @Ral, it is sort of weak links, but right now character is being built, showing the characters weakness. Jake is mentally weak, even though his body is stronger than most, Kiln has doubts of her abilities as a guild member, and...yeah Claude still regrets his failure to protect Nirvana, obvious enough but still. It’s good, but could be stronger.
Ralmon
March 15th, 2019, 8:04 pm
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@SansOfDale: This is Ral. Made an account today! Wooh!

While I agree that this does build character, it kinda sacrifices the plot.

The story is really good but I don't it could continue like this for very long. Character is nice and all, but plot is also essential.